Talk:Battle of Malakoff

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Iiiiaaaa in topic Tone of article

Tone of article

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Does anyone else feel that this article reads like a particularly exciting and popular history book, rather than an encyclopedia article, if I can make this distinction? Phrases like "under the fire of a thousand cannons" etc seem fairly rhetorical and less encyclopediac 122.57.65.138 (talk) 23:41, 29 October 2008 (UTC)Reply

I agree. And lots of sentences are not English really, like "There were, however, many reasons against so decided a course". Iiiiaaaa (talk) 03:06, 5 November 2009 (UTC)Reply

Sorry, old boy, but that's perfectly good English, although perhaps a little old fashioned.Scartboy (talk) 22:47, 12 November 2011 (UTC)Reply
Doubly sorry, sir, but that is not old-fashioned English but contemporary awfully translated something else. Iiiiaaaa (talk) 14:19, 1 June 2013 (UTC)Reply

Still, some of the sentences, as at the very beginning, neither parse nor make sense; they read like clumsy translations. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 98.82.125.102 (talk) 16:02, 7 September 2012 (UTC)Reply

File:William Simpson - Attack on the Malakoff.jpg to appear as POTD soon

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Hello! This is a note to let the editors of this article know that File:William Simpson - Attack on the Malakoff.jpg will be appearing as picture of the day on September 7, 2012. You can view and edit the POTD blurb at Template:POTD/2012-09-07. If this article needs any attention or maintenance, it would be preferable if that could be done before its appearance on the Main Page so Wikipedia doesn't look bad. :) Thanks! howcheng {chat} 21:19, 5 September 2012 (UTC)Reply

The Battle of Malakoff, during the Crimean War, was fought between the Russian and the allied French-British armies on 7 September 1855. In one of the war's defining moments, a French zouave installed the French flag on the top of the Russian redoubt, as depicted here. The battle brought about the capture of Sevastopol after an 11-month siege.Artist: William Simpson; Restoration: Adam Cuerden

Sentence structure

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The article has a 'need editing' heading. What an understatement. Just for example:

"Since the fortress enabled the control of the Black Sea port of Sevastopol, blew up the retreating Russian troops the equipment. By the victory of the Allies had Russia on military fortifications on the Black Sea without. The long-awaited Russian desire to dominate the inland sea and the free access through the Bosporus to the Mediterranean and from there get to the oceans was not true."

But I'm busy elsewhere. Thomas R. Fasulo (talk) 02:50, 7 September 2012 (UTC)Reply

Translation?

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It looks to me as though a different language version (German?) of this article has been run through a very mediocre online translator and uploaded. It has obviously not been edited in any way by somebody who speaks good English.

I'm sure it would be an intersting article - if it were readable! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 87.139.58.51 (talk) 14:14, 7 September 2012 (UTC)Reply

"Commanders and Leaders" section

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It is too easy to kill almost all prominent Russian commanders defending Sebastopol in one-day battle. However, Nakhimov, Kornilov and Istomin were actually dead in September 1855, and actually they were killed at different times. Please correct information in the table. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Goser17 (talkcontribs) 16:51, 6 October 2012 (UTC)Reply

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