Talk:David of Sassoun (statue)

GA Review

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Nominator: Yerevantsi (talk · contribs) 15:53, 29 September 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Kimikel (talk · contribs) 01:04, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

Hello, I will be reviewing this article as part of the January GAN drive. Please expect comments from me within the next few days. Kimikel (talk) 01:04, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

@Yerevantsi: A remarkable statue and a culture about which I'd like to know more. I have left my comments below. Please let me know if you have any questions or concerns regarding my suggestions. Thank you. Kimikel (talk) 18:01, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

@Kimikel: Thanks for taking the time to review the article. I have addressed all your comments. ----Երևանցի ^talk 18:27, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

@Yerevantsi: Thanks for your work here. I've made few minor edits of my own and I feel that this article is ready for GA status as there's nothing left to nitpick. Thank you and congratulations! Kimikel (talk) 19:12, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

Well-written

Lead

• rock-like basalt > technically speaking basalt is a rock, not rock-like

The idea is it was designed to resemble a natural rock formation. I've rephrased it. ----Երևանցի ^talk 17:43, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

• during the one-thousandth > for the thousandth

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• but was removed two years later and Kochar was arrested. but two years later, the statue was destroyed and Kochar was arrested.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• With decline in train arrivals, > Following a decline in arrivals to Yerevan railway station,

 Done ----Երևանցի ^talk 17:45, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

History

• the most prominent artist to move to Soviet Armenia from abroad (in 1936) > who in 1936 became the most prominent artist to move to Soviet Armenia from abroad

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• It was made of gypsum, and was reportedly finished in 18 days [5] (other sources state Kochar spent up to three months on the project). > Kochar made it of gypsum and reportedly finished it in 18 days, though other sources state he spent up to three months on the project.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 11:33, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

• the Russian-language academic publication > which one?

 Added----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• it was positioned > It was positioned

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• , for "anti-Soviet agitation", > remove commas

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• Kochar recreated it, with significant changes from the initial version, which notably included > Kochar recreated it with significant changes from the initial version, which had included

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 18:25, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

• restored (current) > current restored

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• , but no senior official > ; no senior officials

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• including literary scholar and writer > including the literary scholar and writer

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• sculptor Grigor > the sculptor Grigor

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• Actor Zhan > The actor Zhan

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• It was erected > The statue was erected

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• (1962), in front > remove comma

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• memorial, erected > memorial erected

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• new trend in statues in Yerevan, where they no longer dominate over people and streets by their formidable height > new trend in statues in Yerevan in which they no longer towered over people and streets with their formidable height.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 11:33, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

• , at the feet of the horse, > remove commas

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• lighting, was > lighting, and was

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

Description and symbolism

• with an overly muscular > with a heavily muscled physique

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 13:23, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• "lightning sword"—Tur ketsaki > tur ketsaki ("lightning sword").

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 13:23, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• Kochar explained the large size of the horse's tail and the lack of reins and bit with its anthropomorphic and supernatural qualities as narrated in the epic. > Kochar explained that the large size of the horse's tail, its lack of reins and bit, and its anthropomorphic and supernatural qualities were as narrated in the epic.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 13:23, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

open to "choosing" > open to choosing (not enough of Simyan's work to require quotation marks)

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 13:23, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

trail station building > railway station. (unless you're referring to a different building)

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 13:23, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

pool, from which the epic hero rises, symbolize > pool from which David rises symbolize

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 13:23, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

Reception

• For this section, I would recommend adding titles for as many people as possible. "The sculptor Lev Kerbel said XYZ" is more impactful than "Lev Kerbel said XYZ" because it adds context and a degree of authority.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 11:33, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

• which earned him...widely considered Kochar's > which earned Kochar...widely considered his

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 11:33, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

• A Communist magazine > A communist magazine

It refers to the party, not the ideology. I've rephrased it to "local Communist Party magazine".----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• acquired an iconic status,[59][60] and: remove comma

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• It has also been widely admired > The statue has also been widely admired

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• and often called as a > and has often been called a

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 11:33, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

• Architects Artsvin Grigoryan > The architects Artsvin Grigoryan

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• and compared favorably > and compared it favorably

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• it powerfully reflects> the statue powerfully reflects

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• As early as 1998 Armen Shekoyan > add comma

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• location—now just an ordinary residential area due to the decline in train arrivals—the > location, which had become an ordinary residential area due to the decline in train arrivals,

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 11:33, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

• architect Garri Rashidyan > the architect Garri Rashidyan

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 11:33, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

Notes

• Note C: Remove "However" and the comma.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:52, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

Verifiability

• The film studio Hayfilm (formerly Armenfilm) uses the statue as its logo., It appeared on a 1968 and 1990 Soviet stamps and a 1991 Soviet commemorative coin., Yerevan Metro tokens depict the statue., and The statue is featured in the 1987 Soviet Armenian film The Road to Sasuntsi Davit [hy]. are all unsourced.

Added ref to Hayfilm logo.----Երևանցի ^talk 12:09, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

Added refs to others as well.----Երևանցի ^talk 18:25, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

• Note A is unsourced.

Added source.----Երևանցի ^talk 12:09, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• Footnote 26 is the only one that puts the page number in the prose itself. For consistency, I would recommend removing it and putting it in the citation itself, since it's the only page you cite from that source.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 12:09, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

• Translations of all of the titles of foreign language sources would be very helpful.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 12:09, 7 January 2025 (UTC)

Spot check

• 19: Verified
• 61: Verified
• 88: Verified
• 25: Verified
• 17: Verified

Neutrality, broadness, and stability

• No issues.

Illustrated

• All images are properly tagged and beneficial to the article.

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