Talk:Ganis Chasma
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Ammar
editI think your page is not complete yet. there is no overview coverage of the topic. This seem to me as a first draft more than finished work. I think you need to work on the first paragraph by mentioning the most vital thing in this project "The hook" ( why is this topic interesting?, Why should I read it? Why should I care? ) once you figure that out. write the hook after the first sentence in the article, if you will. Also, try to manipulate the first image so it doesn't squeeze the text to the side, it's unappealing. I might sound harsh, but I really want to see this article succeed. PS: easy on blowing up pictures, and put more content. AmmarBanafea (talk) 19:30, 30 March 2015 (UTC)
Suggestions from Samantha
editThis draft is fine. I think you could insert external links to a few of your terms, such as "chasma" in your introductory paragraph. I think it would eliminate your need to define it in the paragraph if you just place an external link to the word. Also, I believe your grammar just needs to be double-checked. Mangolava (talk) 01:48, 3 March 2015 (UTC)SR
Suggestions from Shelby
editUnder tectonics, you misspelled coronae. Also, I'm not really sure that the part about what Shalygin and his team are going to publish is necessary for this page. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sjoh197 (talk • contribs) 02:25, 3 March 2015 (UTC)
Suggestions from Rob
editI think you could break up the text a bit more by adding sub sections to better organize the information. The sentence structure in the Ganiki Planitia Quadrangle section could be improved. Also, the last sentence at the end of the first paragraph in the "current volcanic activity" needs to be changed. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Robnarmour1018 (talk • contribs) 03:31, 3 March 2015 (UTC)
Adam
editIntroduction is missing the "n"? I think you should bring the text down for the introduction instead of starting it to the left of the picture. You would only need to bring it down a few lines and I feel this would make it look better. Good work though. You show why the region is important for the planet and why it is relevant. Adamwalsh93 (talk) 13:06, 31 March 2015 (UTC)Adam
Review by Andrew
editYou don't need to type the title for the "Introduction." It will automatically put the overview at the top of the page. I agree with Shelby, you aren't supposed to reference specific researchers (Shalygin), you could change the sentence to read something like "this was interpreted as active hotspot volcanism." In the Tectonics section, after the citation at the end of the first sentence, you need a space. I would also suggest shrinking the images so they fit above the references. Awebb6 (talk) 13:34, 31 March 2015 (UTC)
Ganis or Ganiki Chasma
editEmily Lakdawalla reported a mistake in the identification of Ganiki Chasma here. In effect, USGS doesn't list any Ganiki Chasma, but Ganis Chasma and Ganiki Planitia. --Harlock81 (talk) 10:18, 21 June 2015 (UTC)