Talk:James Milner/GA2
Latest comment: 3 years ago by IronManCap in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: IronManCap (talk · contribs) 21:27, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
Hi, I'm interested in taking up this review. For initial comments, some ref work in adding dates and authors to refs is needed; the ProveIt gadget may be helpful here. Also look at archiving all urls using IABot, and find refs for the two [citation needed] tags in the infobox. Expect further comments in the next 7 days.
- Done have addressed the 2 tags.
Lead
edit- Move ref #7 next to ref #174 in #Style of play per MOS:LEADCITE Done
has been used
→has played
- as who used him (managers, presumably) haven't been mentioned Donerepresented his school
- mention the specific school here Done- Not sure him being a Leeds season ticket holder is notable enough for the lead, I would cut that Done
- I would also merge the sentences about him supporting Leeds and joining their academy Done
aged only 16
- rm "only" per WP:VOICE Done- Add "award" after
PFA Young Player of the Year
Done - Link
free transfer
to Free transfer (association football) and linkvice-captain
to Vice-captain (association football) Done
Early life
editYorkshire Schools cricket team
- Link Yorkshire Doneother clubs in the north
→other clubs in Northern England
Donewhat Milner aspired to do; that is, to come through the academy and play for the first team
→what Milner aspired to do, in coming through the academy and playing for the first team
Done
Club career
edit- One BBC source doesn't justify "widespread praise from commentators" - I would remove "widespread" at the bare minimum Done
the chairman of the club at the time
- who? Done- Preferably remove instances of "even" per WP:VOICE Done
extreme right of the field
→far right of the field
Done- "Winger" should not be capitalised Done
Shortly before the end of his loan period, negotiations between Villa and Newcastle began.
- needs a source Done I have removed it as, after a look I feel it is adequately covered in the paragraph below.
- Move the second image (the free kick one) to the left so it faces the text per MOS:IMAGELOCATION Done
- Also link free kick and Newcastle United in the caption per WP:DUPLINK Done
- Add commas after
at 16 years and 356 days
andand its new manager
Done Allardyce praised Milner highly
- rm "highly" per MOS:PUFFERY / WP:VOICE Doneit was rumoured in May 2008 that he would
- replace "he" with "Milner" Done- Link transfer request Done
Milner continued to impress and scored his second league goal of the season against Blackburn Rovers on 7 February and scored a free kick from outside the penalty area at home against Everton as Villa came back from a 3–1 deficit to draw 3–3 on 12 April.
This sentence needs c/e and some commas, potentially split it out Done- Link free kick in #Aston Villa, delink in #Style of play. Done
- Man City section is well-written.
Vice captain
→Vice-captain
Done- Link Roma. Done
- Add "season" after
during the 2020-21
Done - Reword the opening sentence of the last para of the L'pool section to something like
Milner was not a regular starter during the 2020–21 season, amassing just 11 starts and making 26 appearances overall.
Done As a result he registered his first goalless season of his career.
→As a result, he registered the first goalless season of his career.
Done
International career
edit- Add a comma after "2003 World Youth Championship" Done
he also set up
- "also" is unnecessary here Donehad a penalty well saved
- rm "well" per WP:VOICE Donesail over the crossbar
→go over the crossbar
Done
the Netherlands
→the Netherlands
Donehowever he was substituted
→although he was substituted
DoneWhere he started but
- rm "where" DoneHowever Milner failed to secure a starting place. Only appearing once, in the final group game against Costa Rica after England had already been eliminated.
- This needs c/e and sourcing- The paragraph beginning
Milner was part of the England squad for EURO 2016.
needs some serious c/e for grammar
- @REDMAN 2019: Any updates on the above two points? They're the last two points to address before this passes GAN. IronManCap (talk) 14:54, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
- I have addressed these two points myself, and am hence passing the article. IronManCap (talk) 20:08, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- @REDMAN 2019: Any updates on the above two points? They're the last two points to address before this passes GAN. IronManCap (talk) 14:54, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
Style of play
edit- I would move the image to the left and quote box to the right so the image faces the text per MOS:IMAGELOCATION and alternates with the last one Done
- Link Manuel Pellegrini Done
who managed Milner at Manchester City, described Milner
→who managed Milner at Manchester City, described him
Done- Add a comma after
in the modern game
Done - Rm the colon in the last sentence Done
Refs
edit- Mark The Daily Telegraph and The Times refs with
|url-access=limited
Done - Please be consistent if possible with
|work=
vs|publisher=
for BBC Sport; the former is preferable per WP:ITALICWEBCITE - Please add any missing authors using
|first=
,|last=
, and if necessary,|author-link=
Other comments
edit- Career statistics and honours sections look good.
- Earwig suspects a copyvio of this website, although that is a low-level website that is almost certainly a WP:Wikipedia mirror. It also has weird line breaks within prose, almost certainly to avoid copyvio detection on its part, so no concerns here.
- I asked about that website before nominating and was told that it shouldn't be a problem. REDMAN 2019 (talk) 12:44, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
- This script found no WP:DUPLINKs.
- Good to see MOS:NUMBER being followed.
Those are my comments. Ping me when addressed. IronManCap (talk) 13:42, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
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