Wikipedia:Peer review/James Milner/archive5
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This article became a good aricle almost three years ago and since then the subject's career has greatly escalated with him playing for his country at the world cup.
I think this aricle needs another proper review to make sure it covers everything.
Thanks, BUC (talk) 12:49, 16 August 2010 (UTC)
Comments by Sandman888 (talk) Latest FAC 19:55, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
- Lead
- "Milner's talent in football, cricket, and long-distance running was recognised when he was a child. He represented his school in these sports and played football for amateur teams from Rawdon and Horsforth. " doesn't read great.
- "only" POV
- it reads like he stills plays for Newcastle. please expand/rewrite last section.
- Early life
- what's "11 GCES"?
- "Milner took as much interest in watching football as he did playing it. " OR
- "Peter and Lesley," unimportant
- "played for the Republic of Ireland at under-14 level" doesnt match infobox
- "against Italy, Czech Republic and Brazil, scoring a goal against Brazil.[8]" reads poorly
- Club career
- More pov:
- with a deft first touch of the ball and manoeuvre
- Milner continued to impress
- [who?]:
- He could be deemed a traditional English winger.
- the whole style of play reads really poorly.
- References
- Don't mix date formats, keep to DD MONTH YYYY
Decent article. I might do some more, but that should get something going. Consider reviewing History of FC Barcelona. Sandman888 (talk) Latest FAC 19:55, 17 August 2010 (UTC)